Some people think that prison sentences should not be used in dealing with criminals. Education and job training should be used instead. To what extent do you agree on disagree?

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Many people think that prison sentences are not the best way to handle crime, they advocate that education and job training would be a more effective way to deal with offenders. Depending on what type of crime a person has committed, jail is not always the best answer. Many small crimes that are inherent to society
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as drug dealing, or car stealing are money-driven, and executed by people coming from the lowest social classes. They usually grew up in an environment that allows crime to flourish, with very few examples of people who have become successful due to their hard work and where it is very easy to get caught in a negative spiral, attracted by the illusion of easy money. For those type of criminals, prison sentences present very few benefits, they will just wait to be released. No real solution has been offered to them, and
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, are very likely to re-offend. For more extreme cases,
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, prison is the only solution. Serial-killers and child molesters
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must be taken away from society. It is arguable that anyone should be allowed forgiveness, unfortunately, they present a risk which is way too high for other citizens. Education and job training will not produce any result as
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crimes are committed by individuals suffering from mental disorders from which no judge could ever be absolutely convinced that they have recovered.  It is a complicated subject which required every case to be treated individually. There is no one size fits all response.
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, I am persuaded that education and training should be the preferred answer to crimes motivated by financial gains.
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