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Some people believe that children are given too much free time . They feel that this time should be used to do more school work. How do you think children should spend their free time.

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Needless to say,
education
 is very important for all
the
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young children in
this
 modern day. A number of individuals say that children ought to spend their free
time
on
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studying. Others think studying and rest have to
be
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balance
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. In
this
 essay, I will attempt to outline both ideas and provide my perspective below. To commence with, there have several
reason
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 for why many
of
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parents wish their son or daughter spending more
time
 on studying.
Firstly
, children can absorb a lot of extra new knowledge and improve their school's exam result.
For instance
, in Taiwan, some of
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arents would pay a private tutor to
teaching
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 their children at home after school or attending
to
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tutoring class in order to help them to obtain a wonderful exam result.
Moreover
, concentrating on studying can apply to
studying
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 in
the
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celebrity colleges or universities, which have a high quality of
education
 system, high reputation and full-scale facilities.
Also
 for your future career,
this
 will promote your personal value .
However
, the opposite group hold with a different kind of view.
This
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 people support that children should have leisure
time
 after school. The most significant factor is
this
 can reduce their pressure during studying. Studying all day will affect children's mental health problem, so giving an
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enough
inch
 leisure
time
 is very important.
Furthermore
,
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parent can use
this
 period of
time
 to build up family-ship, they can be enjoyable to playing together or having fun in their life
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 To sum up, in my opinion, while
education
 is one of the significant
thing
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 for our offspring. But enough feel
time
is
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is
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indispensable in our life.
Thus
, I would say that
education
 and feel
time
 have to
be
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balance
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balanced
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.
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