The most effective way to solve traffic problems in the cities is to encourage people from suburbs or the countryside to live in the cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

The
first
pie
chart
illustrates amounts of the power used for various purposes by Australian households, while the
second
pie
chart
gives pieces of information about the amounts of greenhouse gas emission which they caused. According to the
first
chart
, the largest proportion of
energy
is utilised for heating, which is exactly 12% more than the percentage of
energy
used for water heating.
Additionally
, refrigeration, lighting and cooling consumed 7%, 4% and 2% of the
energy
generated, respectively.
Hence
, the small minatory of
that is
contributed to cooling. It is apparent the greenhouse gas emission
is resulted
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results
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from
energy
uses. As can be seen from the
second
pie
chart
, the percentages of greenhouses emitted by all purposes, except heating, are almost doubled than
p
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the
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ercentages of
energy
consumed.
Accordingly
, the highest amount of greenhouse gas emitted by water heating, and the smallest by cooling. Even though
,
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heating consumed almost half of the total
energy
generated, it just produced almost 15% of the emissions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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