Many people believe that schools should teach children to become good citizens and workers rather than independent individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion and relevant examples

Educational institutions like
schools
and colleges have a duty to
mold
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students into
law abiding
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citizens
and hardworking employees.
However
, I don’t think that
this
should be at the cost of their individuality. Individuality helps people stand out in a crowd. Independent thinking fuels their creativity and helps them become good writers, thinkers and artists. Their creative pursuits will bring glory to the nation and give
patriots
even more reasons to be proud of their country. Children spend a great deal of time in
schools
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. The
text books
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, the teachers and the general atmosphere at school have a major impact on their impressionable minds. If
schools
don’t encourage creativity and independent thinking, the nation will suffer. Just because someone thinks independently, it doesn’t mean that they can’t become good
citizens
or good employees. I can’t understand how independent thinking will make a person anti-national or anti-social. Some of the greatest
patriots
we have seen were highly creative people who thought independently. There are numerous examples of
such
men and women in the annals of World history. A nation needs great thinkers, writers, artists, scientists and philosophers to take its culture and legacy forward. We can’t accomplish much by being mechanized
patriots
and workers.
To conclude
, I don’t agree with the argument that
schools
should only teach students to become good
citizens
and workers. Yes, these institutions should teach these values, but they should
also
encourage independent thinking. A person can be an independent thinker and a patriot at the same time. If one studies world history one can find several examples of thinkers who were
also
great
patriots
and
citizens
. Since students spend a great deal of their time at school, it is the right place to learn all of these values.
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