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The picture below shows the use of renewable energy accounting the total energy from 1971 to 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graphs illustrate the data about the amount of renewable
energy
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 has been consumed in six different countries over the course of
fourty
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forty
 years from 1971 to 2006. As can be witnessed that the highest amount of
energy
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 was consumed by Finland, while the United Kingdom is consumed
energy
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 at least.
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, the consuming
energy
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 trend in whole countries has an upward tendency. The
first
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 thing should note is that Finland reached 25 per
cent
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 in
i
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nitial year in 1971. Whereas, in the following years, it has been experienced fluctuation and reached
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at
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a
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s
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imilar
point
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 in 1976 and 1983, around 22 per
cent
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. While, Denmark witnessed a similar drip/drop to the bottom, under ten per
cent
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 in 1986, after that it reached
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at
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 peak in 1991 to 15 per
cent
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.
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, the line graph of
U
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nited State is identical
with
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 Denmark in the period of 1976 to 1991. it is increased gradually,
then
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, reached to
s
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point
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 with Denmark in late 2006. Another thing to
point
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 out is that even though not started at the same
point
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, France began at ten and Germany at five per
cent
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, respectively. both of them have witnessed an up and down quite parallelly before,
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 in late 2001.
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