Some people believe that it is possible for a country to be economically successful and have a clean environment. Others argue that these two aims are not compatible. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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debate about whether is it feasible for a nation
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/thrive economically wealthy and prosperous
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have a fresh and sustainable natural habitat or
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is an impossible mission and infeasible. In my own perspective, both economic interests and natural habitats should be taken into consideration in connection with
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natural stability.
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hand, it is obviously witnessed that some better-off
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huge capital are fully capacity and capability
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a fresh, green, and clean life without worry about possibly
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fear of economic deficit. Japan and Singapore, for
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, are not only wealthy and developed
countries
in Asia
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but
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have the highest hygienic and sanitary quality in the world. Thanks to the remarkable investment in
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various advanced technologies and eco-friendly products in myriad aspects of life,
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household water or
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widely biodegradable packs, the amount of garbage and poisonous water is merely zero.
On the other hand
, many people assume that leading industries attached traces of pollutants from power plants, which has long been accused as a culprit of damaging the environment.
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true because all probable successful
countries
are able to reduce the adverse ramifications. To be more specific, being invested and financial aids to facilitate
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waste detoxification and filter
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from developed
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, many undeveloped and developing
countries
are easily solving and processing polluted water in myriad complex industry areas, as far as not completely affected by those disposals.
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conclusion, having developed successful businesses and
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a clean and fresh environment are
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if
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and individuals have integrated and unified in action to alleviate and harmonize the detrimental impact of developing
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on nature.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic growth
  • environmental sustainability
  • policies
  • technology
  • commitment
  • green technology
  • renewable energy sources
  • carbon emissions
  • pollution
  • industrial development
  • production
  • consumption
  • depletion of natural resources
  • loss of biodiversity
  • unsustainable
  • consumption patterns
  • sustainable development
  • technological innovation
  • global cooperation
  • circular economy
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