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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
It is believed that these days there are an arrange of choice. I completely agree with
this
 statement and will give my reasons below.
To begin
 with, the area of choice is very broadened. What
this
 means is that it is possible to buy a variety of goods thanks to the developed the internet.
For example
, the Internet users can access foreign shopping malls and they can browse items, compare features,
such
 as prices, colours etc. to products from companies in their country before making a purchase decision.
Hence
, it is fair to say that people nowadays have more consumer goods because the internet seems to help them to have larger access to products.
Also
, the development of transport has affected the options people have. We could select foreign items that cannot purchase in our countries.
This
 is because faster and advanced transportation contributes to the reduction in import prices and time for item delivery.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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