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Nowadays, a lot of information about medical conditions and illnesses is freely available on the internet. Is this a good thing or a bad thing for most people? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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nternet has changed everything. Currently, healthcare
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 and there are huge risks related to
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 medication without medical supervision.
Internet
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 is a virtual space without regulations. Individuals are able to publish whatever they think
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is right.
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the amount of
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 for several purposes,
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, no one can assure the
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 of
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information
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 because it is a
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 task.
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, Wikipedia is the biggest online library in all over the world. Thousands of articles are edited every day by thousands of volunteers.
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 of the articles. People could experiment
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several problems if they consume medical and illness
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 from these type of sources. Individuals who take medications without professional supervision are at risks. Aas a result of self-medication, our bodies can suffer short-term or long-term consequences
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 as headaches and vision problems to name a few.
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internet
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entrepeneur
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 called Jhon Chacon started an online business to sell pills in order to improve cognition. He edited many sources of
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 to promote his false value proposition. He invested
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 many influencers and marketing campaigns.
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nternet for
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 are risky. In a nutshell, a lot of healthcare
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free
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 available on the
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 is not a positive thing, because the quantity of
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 is not the same as the
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 of
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 and there are huge risks if individuals decide to take medication under
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