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The news about violent crimes may frighten people or, on the contrary, encourage them to commit a crime. Therefore, some believe that these types of news should not be reported in newspapers or on TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Abusive crimes news causes several impacts for the news receivers
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 as fearfulness, In stark contrast,
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, it gives idea for the news followers to do the crime.
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, a group of people consensus that newspapers or television should not broadcast any kind of violent crimes news.
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, ahead
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my stance, I believe there are a lot of pros related to
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, and
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 viewpoint will be discussed to reach its
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 conclusion. There are several
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about
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why abusive crimes should be shown
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 TV and newspaper.
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, it gives some benefits
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 us. Because it gives information
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 as the location, and when was it happen, to make us more aware and more secure.
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, to know how to prevent if
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 kind of case is facing us.
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, we can keep emergency number earlier,
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 as ambulances, polices and hospital.
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, women are always seen as
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eak subject, in so many cases women are often become the victims.
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, as women, we are able to learn the art of self-defence in case it
happen
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 to us in the future.
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, the television still able to broadcast
the violent crimes news
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the news of the violent crime
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 with
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ondition. It can be shown only in some special time.
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, special for news about crimes can be put in adult hours.
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ime where children
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 usually not watching
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late night
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 hours and dawn times. To conclude, it is clear that violent crimes news are allowed to be shown
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 television and newspaper.
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, the positive way to see it and the condition are the main keys that should be underlined. I personally hope that
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ecommendation for people who
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 to see abuse crime news both in newspaper and TV.

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