The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last twenty years. Many of the problems young people now experience , such as juvenile delinquency , arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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teenagers are not disciplined
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • evolution
  • domestic roles
  • diverse professional engagements
  • dual-working parents
  • family dynamics
  • juvenile delinquency
  • societal and economic factors
  • dual-income households
  • childcare methods
  • community support systems
  • gender roles
  • family responsibilities
  • professional aspirations
  • development needs
  • correlation
  • simplistic causation
  • workplace policies
  • flexible hours
  • parental leave
  • gender equality
  • role models
  • successful womanhood
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