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In the past, the role of teacher was to provide information. Today, students have access to wide sources of information. There is, therefore, no role of teacher in modern education. Do you agree or disagree?

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The advent of the internet HHS’s changed the way people access
information
. A growing number of people are considering using media to enrich their
knowledge
 and think their teacher
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 not helpful anymore. Personally, I disagree that teachers do not matter nowadays because media sometimes provide us
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false
information
 which may lead to bad
behaviors
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. Some people are strong advocates of replacing teachers’ role of
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nternet because social media provide them with quick ways of getting any source of
information
. Unlike sitting in
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lassroom with tons of students, learning
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nternet is relatively more relaxing and you can manage your
time
 at your disposal. Some workers,
for instance
, do not have sufficient
time
 to complete their degrees whether it is doctor or postgraduate, since they have
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eavy workload in their position in
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ay
time
. They would resort to pick up a most suitable type of class which is available after working hours. But I strongly argued that teachers are still the essential part of our
knowledge
 acquire process because they can lead us to a correct direction. Not everyone is beneficiary of the
information
 from the media and they are
sometime
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 confused about what is right or what is wrong.
For example
, students who want to acquire some
knowledge
 of mathematics are provided with wrong math problems solving techniques by some websites. In
this
 case, if students do have the ability to correct themselves, they would be following the wrong path for a long
time
.
However
, teachers can not only make
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tudent realize what is acceptable in society but
also
 offer them the correct
information
 they need. In conclusion, I disagree with the idea that people do take the role of teacher important. Teachers can still be the priority when it comes to access
knowledge
 in a more quick and safe way.
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