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In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations. Support your ideas with examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It has been observed that the average life expectancy of people living in developed countries is burgeoning unprecedentedly.
This
 trend ,
however
, poses some issues for the elderly and for the
society
 at large.
This
 essay intends to explain in details the problems associated with the ever-increasing longevity amongst
p
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the
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opulation in the
society
 and identify some feasible measures to mitigate the same. Having a large number of senior citizens would mean that a country has to allocate a bigger amount of taxpayer's fund in services that cater for the need of the elderly like health care and social service allowances.
For instance
, Japan has the highest number of old people in the world and allocated nearly one-
third
 of its country's budget for their care.
This
 proportion could have been financed into something more essential
that
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 supports progress.
Additionally
, with more elderly versus the working-class citizens, the latter is pressured to work hard so they could contribute hefty to the high-imposed tax, in order to recuperate from the amount expended for former. There are,
however
, some measures that can be laid out to curtail
this
 societal issue.
Firstly
, the government has to make the elderly productive by way of giving them jobs that are light but useful.
For instance
, in Singapore, it is common to see elderly doing menial tasks like selling on the streets while being posted in a comfortable location.
Secondly
, governments should encourage young individuals to save up for their retirement at
such
 a young age in order to best prepare themselves financially in the future. To recapitulate, despite the obvious drawbacks associated with having more elderly in a
society
 like extra income pressure for the working members of
society
 and dissipation of economic revenue for the welfare of the elderly, these can be corrected by good
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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