Many believe that the best way to ensure a happier society is to reduce the difference in income earnings between the rich and poor. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Happiness
is the most desirable part of life. Some people argue that equal
income
level among rich and poor people will help to create a joyful
society
due to the fact that
this
will bring a sense of equality, less competition for luxurious things and social
harmony
. In
this
essay, I will contend supporting arguments to
this
view and provide examples to elaborate its strong need in
the
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society
. There is no doubt that
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evel of earning impact
upon
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the
status
of
society
and its
happiness
.
Firstly
,
income
would bring poor people to
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qual
lifestyle
of
society
and
this
will create a sense of equality among them.
For example
, in most of the Asian countries, most of the rich people do not like to invite and talk to the persons who are living in slum condition owing to the fact that they think that
this
will lower their
status
.
However
, if they have
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income
and
lifestyle
then
nobody
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to think about
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background
status
.
Secondly
, there will be less competition to buy new luxurious items.
For instance
,
this
is a scientific phenomenon that a human likes to buy things by imitating others in
the
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society
. Equal earning means very similar
lifestyle
and mentality to save money.
Hence
they would not have any curiosity and social pressure to buy expensive items.
Lastly
, all
such
conditions lead towards social
harmony
where people give value to family, friends and
society
than to run around money and higher
lifestyle
.
However
,
this
is inevitable to avoid that only better earning does not bring
happiness
. There is
also
a need to change thinking of people to pay equal respect and dignity to every culture, believes and human existence.
For instance
, terrorist and corrupt people of
society
, who have the chance to have good earning, family, friends and high
status
in the
society
, do not value to social bonds and
harmony
. The only need is to change and divert their mentality rather just considering
income
level to bring
happiness
in the
society
and nation. Not only does
this
, for most of the people earning do not impact on their
happiness
other than good healthy family, habitat and high attitude.
Nevertheless
happier
society
could eliminate these factors up to a high extent and to bring greater value to life, family and
society
. To recapitulate, there is no doubt that good and equal
income
impacts more on happy
society
than any other factors. The only need is to consider all
such
conditions to at least enable every member of the
society
to upgrade their
status
to equality and social
harmony
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
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  • In a nutshell
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