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People have little understanding of the importance of the natural world. What are the reasons and how can people learn more about the natural world?

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Nowadays more and more people have a little understanding of the importance of the natural world. There are several reasons for
this
, and something could be made.
Firstlty
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, In the
last
 decades, more and more people moved from
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ountryside to different cities. People that use to live far from
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nature and natural world will lose the ability to connect and understand
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atural process.
This
 situation could lead to serious problems. Recent studies suggest that nearly 80% of young people ( from 25 to 50 yr) don't care about our
enviroment
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environment
. If we will continue with
this
 trend we will end up destroying our planet. To cite an example, we can look at the effects of the climate changing and all the consequences that are related. I strongly believe that both schools and governments should take severe measures in order to tackle
this
 problem,
also
 by creating specific school study programs where
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children
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 could study
about
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nature.
For instance
, when
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 was a child I visited a farm with my class. That experience was so interesting that changed my life. After that
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 applied for a master in food law
beacase
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because
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 really care about our environment.
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