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Nowadays, people have greater access to fast foods. Do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

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Rising population and busy lifestyle of residents have increased
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 requirements, which has resulted in the surge of unhealthy
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 joints. Some individuals believe that the easy availability of
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 has several benefits, whereas many others, including me, have an opposite view.
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 essay will outline the advantages and disadvantages for easy reach to fast foods and why I feel ultimately it is not for the best of human health. Proponents of a view who sees it as blessings have following arguments in their favour. Due to the easy availability of
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 anytime anywhere, one does not need to stay hungry for a long time. Staying hungry for an extended period can
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 mood swings and becomes uncomfortable at times. As fatty
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 options spikes, so the competition between vendors who are selling it, which makes it economical compared to a healthy meal. Cheaper
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 is always welcome by financially weaker section of society. On the flip side, the easy convenience of
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 a meal has a significant disadvantage.
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 and foremost, one does not make an effort to find a meal with vitamin and nutrients when something is readily available and even at a cheaper price.
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, fast
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 has a lot of fats, sugar & salt in it and excess consumption of
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 in long term has a daunting effect on one's health. It can even lead to acute & chronic diseases like obesity, diabetes & blood pressure. To conclude, contemporary lifestyle has given a rise to easy accessibility of the fatty & unhealthy meals,
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, drawbacks of
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 availability far outweigh the benefits it provides.benefits it provides.
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