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Big salary is much important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

#salary #job #satisfaction
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Some people assume that large income is more of an importance than gaining fulfillment from
work
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. I mostly disagree with
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 statement. On the one hand, earning a big wage is primary of importance. In order to improve their
life
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 standarts people need some amount of money.
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, living in a large apartment, buying luxury clothes or expencive devices, traveling the world requires money which wouldn’t be are case
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.
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, living a luxurious
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 is not everone’s priority and people still can maintain a stable, fulfilling
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 without earning too much.
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 working on high-paying jobs puts more responsibility on people’s shoulders,
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 people who
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 on high-payin jobs are under the strain of stress since these workers have more responsibilities.
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, working for the sake of the feeling of gratification they get from
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 has positive impacts on people. They are less likely to feel stressed or depressed at
work
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 since they are more motivated to carry out their tasks because they are personally interested in them. In conclusion, gaining satisfaction from
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 is primary of importance for workers for two main reasons:
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, it motivates them for performing their tasks in a more productive way since they are personally interested in them.
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, in order to live a fulfilling
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 earning big bills is not cruicial.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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