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Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. Why do you think this is happening? And how can we solve this problem?

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 in the way of living has resulted in several loopholes as well. One of them is that daily
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 of
food
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 are being wasted all across the globe.
This
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 essay will discuss a few causes of these issues
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 their solutions, followed by a reasonable conclusion. The first reason could be increasing disposable income. As the disposable income of the
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increasing
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their
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, their
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 attitude towards valuing and saving things is
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 changing
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same
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the same
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 is the case with
the
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apply
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meal
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meals
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.
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early
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the early
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days
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while
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 eating outside,
people
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use
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used
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 to get the leftover meal packed to have it later
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whereas
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 nowadays they simply
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 it away.
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, we can take care of
this
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 emerging trend by placing a separate clean section for leftover
food
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 at all the eating joints so that
food
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 can be given to
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needy
person
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people
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. Another cause is that a considerable number of
restaurants
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 only keep the option of a full plate
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 their menu.
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, the proportion of
foodstuff
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 served at many
restaurants
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are
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 standard and
do
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 not differ on the basis of the number of
people
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 eating. To illustrate, if a person orders
foodstuff
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food
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 at a cafe and there is only an option of
full
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a full
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 plate, it is obvious that the person will not be able to finish the whole portion on
its
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their
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 own and the
food
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 will be wasted. To resolve these issues, the
restaurants
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 and all the meal joints should be instructed to bring variety in the proportion of
foodstuff
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food
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 served so as to minimise the wastage.
To conclude
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,the rise in the trend of wasting
food
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 everywhere is mainly
due to
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 increased disposable income and limited portion
option
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 at
eating-joints
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eating joints
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 and these issues could be resolved by introducing a separate and clean section for waste
food
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 at the restaurant so that
they
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it
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 can be provided to the
needful
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people
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 and
also
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 by inculcating various portion options at the
restaurants
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.

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development
Add more depth for each cause and link it clearly to a solution for each point.
grammar
Rewrite long, awkward sentences into shorter, simple ones to reduce errors.
coherence
Use simple linking words to guide the reader through the ideas.
structure
End with a strong conclusion that restates both causes and how to solve them.
structure
Text shows a clear plan with an introduction and a conclusion.
content
Two main causes are named and a solution is suggested.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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