managing children in this organization has drawn me more to these children and over the years I can’t hold back my tears when I see them re-unite with their parents or probably finish secondary

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organization has drawn me more to these children and over the years I can’t hold back my tears when I see them
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with their parents or
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finish secondary school, gain admission into the University or graduate from a University . These are the happiest moments of my life. I
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move to tears when they give me so much credit on how I have
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them achieve what they have become. It so
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I have resolved that to continue to offer help and support to
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children, teenagers in
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improve on myself and I am
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