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Governments around the world spend too much money on treating illnesses and diseases and not enough on health education and prevention. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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I agree with the statement that Governments around the world spend too much money on treating illnesses and diseases and not enough on health education and prevention. Every area of the world
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 their individual health care policies and different people facing
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different
 types of diseases. Today
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estern world spend
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uge amount of money on their citizens but
comparitively
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comparatively
 very less amount on prevention. It
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often
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 that every problem has
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olution in it. The Government can
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definitely
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arious thing to solve these types of issues.
For instance
 awareness about healthy
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, Strict rules for product packaging to
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maintain
 it's
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category
 with red, green and black marks. Health education should starts from school level so that at least after
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ew years they will get good results out of it. Majority problems regarding illness
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occured
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occurred
 due to lack of exercise & proper knowledge etc.
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The Government can promote
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bicycles
 or walk for short distance
instead
 of
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ar or other vehicles. It will
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olve traffic problem too. The government can keen keep eye on agriculture where majority chemicals are used which is
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asic reason
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 long term diseases like Cancer, Stroke. Every country
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 their
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own reasons like people don't understand, we can't change
this
 situation due to
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uge population and so on. Best way to solve
this
 issue is to
first
 teach people what is
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ealthy
life style
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lifestyle
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, prefered food
acording
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according
 to their location, importance of fitness, regular time out of
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usy schedule for their own
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 wellness. Parents are role models for children once they start everybody start. It is
also
 understood that some illness arises suddenly without any prior symptoms.
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Awareness
 about health, caring, regular body fitness
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exercise
realy
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really
 makes a difference. Though
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overnment can't avoid spends over treatment but
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icture completely.
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