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Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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dyas
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days
, many people move towards the
city
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 area which allows
to make
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 new
construction
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 in order to
fullfill
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fulfil
 the requirement. Many people think that the new
construction
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 should be controlled by
government
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whie
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while
 other people
belive
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believe
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 that who spend money and time to
built
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 that building should be free to design it as they see fit. On one hand, when
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g
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overnment take control of new construct building, they look after some basic criteria, like
saftey
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safety
 and material
qulity
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quality
 used for the building. When
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g
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overnment involve, people who make new
construction
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 make sure that the building was stand on
government
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 rule. In my opinion,
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g
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overnment should involve in new construct building of
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c
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ity. For an example, In my country India,
many
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costruction
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construction
company
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companies
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 has to require
a
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apply
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permission from
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g
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the
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overnment to construct
n
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ew building which
check
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 the area of
construction
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 as well as
asure
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ensure
 the
safty
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safety
 and
qulty
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quality
 of building.
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, people are free to design
b
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uilding as they see fit because every person has
it
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 own choice they own place and finance to construct the building. Controlling the
government
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 bring pressure on
o
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the
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wner of the building
whch
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which
 create many
issue
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issues
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. For an instance, In my
city
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, one
well known
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well-known
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 builder
want
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 to construct a shopping mall in
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c
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ity but due to
government
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 rules his project is still in
panding
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pending
spending
 even though he has his own land and money. In
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nut shell
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nutshell
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, in my opinion,
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government controlled
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government-controlled
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 is
necessory
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necessary
 because they take basic
reuirement
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requirement
 in their account like safety and
qulity
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quality
 of building.
Hence
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,
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government controlled
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government-controlled
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 of
n
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the
a
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ew building is
helpfull
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helpful
.
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