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Although many people value their public parks, this space could be better used for other purposes such as residential areas for the ever growing population or to develop business and boost economies. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some people argue that public parks should be converted into
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esidential area to solve overpopulation or commercial are to improve
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ocal economy even though a green land plays a significant role in the friendly environment and social cohesion. I totally disagree with
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, there are numerous plants in the public
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 and they could improve inhabitation having healthy and habitual environment.
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 of absorbing carbon dioxide emission, releasing oxygen, and resisting some
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 pollutants which damage
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ody’s respiratory system, these functions of plant make the
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 become fresh and clean. In the
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, breathing fresh
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 enable people to feel relaxed and to relieve stress. They are not only a natural
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 purifier but
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 provide a habitat for diverse species of animals and plants.
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, an advantage of the green land is that it supplies the public place where the residents could be assembled to do outdoor activities.
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, most people are inclined to go to the
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 or garden which is adjacent to their home to jog, walk, or have
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icnic in leisure time if they do not take much time to visit
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ar rural area. Those who often gather around the
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, have gradually reinforced social cohesion.
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 means that the conflicts in the society are probably reduced by a sense of belonging of a community.
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, it is important to note that these green lands
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 refine visual appealing in the city. If the city
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 just filled with buildings or skyscrapers, it may be possible to make people feel bored and dulled; whereas lush garden with colourful flowers and trees could make our living place more interesting and bring people closer to
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nature. In conclusion, in my opinions, there is no doubt that the parks have
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aluable place for people. We should not remove them for boosting
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conomy or expand
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esidential area.

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