Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool.Others, however, believe that videos games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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evolved a lot in the recent past, during my childhood I used to play snake games in the basic mobile phone, now we have
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games with
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ot of graphics in the mobile phones. It is
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act that many are getting addicted
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mobile games. Obviously, it
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egative effect
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one's character. On one hand, we have mind games
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as sudoku, chess and other mathematical games which will boost our computative ability.
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, there are many new
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up companies has
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in the recent past, that teaches children lessons with the help of games. It is evident from
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company's growth results that,
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type of educative games has received
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huge support from parents who struggle to teach their kids about the school lessons.
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, we cannot deny the fact that
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youngsters are very much addicted to
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video games. Some games even induce violence in their minds,
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, wrestling games. Which makes them
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try wrestling techniques with their fellow kids. We cannot
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about the news that
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many kids have attempted suicide after getting addicted to blue whale game.
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exaggregration
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but the truth. Many universities and schools
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banned playing PUB-G game
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their campus as many students were addicted to it. Not only kids and youngsters, even grown adults are addicted to
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games and spending their
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money for online purchasing of useless
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accessories. To conclude my point, It would be better for all the
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governments
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the addictive video games and ask their fellow citizens to avoid playing video games. It would be better if we promote outdoor games which will help to improve one's fitness.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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