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Some people say that educational success most of the time depends on having a good teacher. Others say that student attitudes also do matter. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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To survive in
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 competitive world, educational success matters a lot. To gain
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 excellence, both the tutor and the
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 need to pitch in their efforts. A good
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 is necessary to impart education because / for they know how to teach lessons and keep the interests of the students alive. Their own knowledge about the subject has to be good enough for them to be in a position to enlighten any
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. They need to have the patience to deal with their students. But it takes two hands to clap. The attitude of the
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 matters as well. The learner needs to have the zeal to learn new things and a fresh mind to grab all the important information.
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 zeal enables them to grasp knowledge more easily. They need focus as well. Now if the
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 has the potential but the
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 lacks the enthusiasm, it will not work out well. The same will be the case if the situation is reversed. If the
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 is not devoted, the
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 will not be able to achieve much progress even if he is paying total attention. On the bright side, in
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 case, the
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 has the option of finding another
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. In conclusion, a
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’s expertise and a
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’s enthusiasm are both important for the
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 to achieve academic brilliance. Even so, in my opinion, the
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’s attitude towards learning and his insatiable quest for knowledge
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 the more important of these two factors because if one
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 is bad, the
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 has the option of finding a better
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 elsewhere.
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, if the
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 lacks the enthusiasm to learn, nothing can help them.
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