Nowadays, many people use the Internet to get medical advice instead of going to see a doctor. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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It is undeniable that the majority of people prefer to get
information
about their illnesses online.
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negative trend, possible terrible causes of
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and some aftermaths using relevant examples. With developing of internet people start searching for medical pieces of
advice
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nternet for a few reasons.
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, it is argued that usually there is a fear of doctors, and if someone has an opportunity to not visit a doctor at all, he or she will do it.
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nternet gives us a phantom opportunity to get the same
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advice
online.
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octor.
Moreover
, at the same time, there is a hope that there exists a magical pill that will solve all our problems and we just need to find out where we can buy it. A good example of
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is my father. To visit a doctor is not an option for him. He says that he has the same
information
online as doctors, so he doesn’t want to spend his time.
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rend as online medicine has a strongly negative effect. There is a research by the WHO that showed that almost all
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nternet about different illnesses has
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,
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because it contains an old data about it.
As a result
, people get a bad
pieces
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of
advice
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their health in general in a bad way.
For example
, the same research by the WHO showed that people who are not visiting doctors and prefer online medicine live less the people who are not looking for medical
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nternet. As
such
it can be concluded that online medicine is a negative trend and it has a lot of terrible aftermaths.
Moreover
, it should not be forgotten, that it exists a study that contains a lot of
information
about reasons why it can be dangerous.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Telemedicine
  • Anonymity
  • Healthcare professionals
  • Second opinions
  • Remote access
  • Digital platforms
  • Self-diagnosis
  • Convenience
  • Privacy concerns
  • Cost-effective
  • Health empowerment
  • Chronic conditions
  • Cyberchondria
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