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Economic development always harms the environment. It is impossible for a country to both develop the economy and protect the environment at the same time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Constructive evolution of the country may have a detrimental impact on the ecosystem. It is argued that the growth of society and securing the earth is not possible simultaneously. I strongly disagree with
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 notion as with the technology in place, we can achieve both paradigms together plus the oath taken by world powers to protect
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 environment is vital in
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 area. The mother earth has given a lot to its children.
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 evolution of the place, we need to consider protecting the health of our atmosphere. The majority of
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 development
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 taken place with the use of electricity which gets created with the consumption of wood and coal. Now, we are aware that immense pollution can be caused by the use of these resources. Henceforth, the majority of nations are now opting to recycle
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 of creating power
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 as solar energy and wind energy.
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, Germany is the first country that has made
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 possible by developing electricity with the help of these renewable resources which has reduced the pollution level by 70%.
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, the ecosystem can be protected alongside
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continuous development.
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, the global community has already declared a clean-green revolution. Almost all developed and developing countries are abided by
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 revolution which clearly states the use of green and clean energy for the development of the resources. And in case, any nation fails to follow the law
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 they need to face the consequences laid down by the UN.
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, South Korea and Iran had already been banned from nuclear experiments
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 as these countries
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 to meet the bare minimum parameter of
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 adversely affected the atmosphere. In conclusion, it is debatable that the clean ecosystem and
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 growth of the region
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 not realistic.
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I disagree with
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 view because of the fact that with the help of
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 solutions and global
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 commitment towards
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green evolution, we can easily achieve a great deal of modernization with minimal or no impact on the earth.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph focuses on one main idea and connects clearly to your argument.
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Expand your conclusions to reflect on the overall importance of balancing economic development and environmental protection.
coherence and cohesion
Use simpler sentence structures for clarity. Complex sentences can confuse readers.
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You present a clear stance on the issue, strongly disagreeing with the notion that development harms the environment.
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You provide examples, like Germany’s use of renewable energy, to support your argument effectively.
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