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Some lm companies spend millions of dollars on the production of a single movie. Is it necessary to spend a lot of money to make a good movie? What factors contribute to the success of a movie?

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Film companies spend millions of dollars on the production of a single
movie
. Some of them are a hit and others struggle to survive at the box office. Movies with a good script and a storyline
is
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 very rare these days. Movies
also
 tend to be more commercial. Companies invest a lot of
money
 on good locations, fancy cars, good cast etc. Among all these
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they sometimes forget about, whether the
movie
 will be a big hit or not, whether the
money
 invested will be worth it or not. I think spending a lot of
money
 to make a good
movie
 is really not necessary. There are many
films
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firms
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 who have a really low production cost but earn big
money
 at
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ox office. I remember watching
this
 Bollywood
movie
 “Jane Tu Ya Jane Na”.
This
 was a low budget
movie
. I recall the lead actors saying that they just had one van for their make-up, nobody had their own vans. Everybody was
a
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like one giant family. To everybody’s surprise
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the
movie
 was a big hit and earned millions. I think the most important factor that
contribute
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 to the success of the
movie
 is storyline and acting. The story should reach the audiences and make an impact on them in a good way. Acting is
also
 important because the actors are the real characters that reach the audiences. It is important how the
movie
 can connect with the audience.
Therefore
, I think that it is not all necessary to spend millions of dollars in the production of the
movie
. What matters is how deep and meaningful a
movie
 is, and how it can make an impact on the audience.
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