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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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It is believed by people that due to the availability of products everywhere in the world, it has made countries the same. I think the positive of
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 development outweigh the negative.The reason for these good developments is two-fold; globalization and high
product
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 demand. The primary reason for countries becoming somewhat similar is because the availability of resource which is required for making the
product
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 is already available in the market at lower prices across the globe.
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, India already has cheap
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 and other resources which is required to make Samsung mobile. Though
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 mobile is a Korean brand yet it can be made it India.
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, one can buy the original
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 with constant pricing even if one is in a different country. The high production of
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 goods is another reason. People do not have to travel to origin countries to buy the country-specific
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.
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, nowadays people are buying clothes from Zara even though the main branch is in Spain. Due to their ubiquitous stores.
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, a lot of crowds save money on
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 which if translated is positive in any language. To recapitulate, the culture of many countries have become similar because of the change in the need of a customer.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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