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Many people say that the only way to guarantee a job is to complete a course in university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work. How far do you agree or disagree with the above views? Give a reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Getting a
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 on the basis of
education
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 level and
work
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experience
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 are two different
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criteria
' which depends on
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erson's interest and a level of
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ob.
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, ideal
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 goals can be accomplished in
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 long run of
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.
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, having a crew member
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 does not require a particular qualification. I partially agree with
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 statement as
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experience
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 and
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 both are equally important. To achieve a particular kind of ideal
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oneself has to fulfil the
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 requirements of the
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.
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, to be a doctor, a lawyer, an architect, an individual must achieve the set of study skills required for it. To justify, it is globally accepted that university
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 does open plenty of doors for career opportunities.
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, it is true that some jobs
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 not look for any qualifications to pursue the career and
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helps
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 a lot to polish the person's ability to be more successful in the future.
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, in Prince George, British Columbia a famous millionaire
enterpreneur
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entrepreneur
 has not
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 any high school
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 as he has started to help his father in business which
make
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 him
to
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grow his business at a peak level.
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,
work
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experience
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also
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make
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 people
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have the desired career they want on their own. To conclude, while
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 and
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experience
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 both have their own importance it all depends on individual's choice how they want to pursue their life.
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