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Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge what is right and wrong so that they can behave well. Others say that teachers should only teach students academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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While some people believe that a teacher is responsible for helping the pupils discern between right and wrong, others argue that their responsibility ends with only academic teaching. In
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 and age, a child can easily get deviated and might end up choosing the wrong side.
Therefore
 it is highly important for them to have the proper guidance which will help them. About 8 to 10 hours of a student's time is spent in an educational institution. Their major chunk of the day is spent over here. To address
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 to help a child with decision making, and to advice
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if at all there are any issues faced. The college that I studied, ensured that the professors spend some time
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ight behaviour and the ability to distinguish when things are not right.
On the other hand
, there are a few who do not share the same opinion of the former. They believe the role of a teacher should only be limited to teaching. I think there should be a balance of it.
For example
, as a child grows, the involvement of a faculty in the department of advising changes. These days the curriculum is
such
 everything is included in the syllabus. Whether it
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 the behavioural aspect, life skills, decision-making, etc.
This
 helps the tutor to focus and concentrate on the lesson plans. Having looked at both sides, I personally feel
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 role of a teacher cannot be stressed more in order for a pupil to discern between good and bad.
Hence
, with the above statement, I would side with the former view.
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