Government's investment in the art, such as music and theaters is a waste of money. government must invest in public services instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons and example.

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The budgetary allocation is a very crucial task for the
government
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as it affects
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verall
development
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of nation or state including economic
development
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. In developing countries, the
government
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should invest more in public services to upgrade it which directly improves the quality of life that helps to achieve economic
development
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goals. I strongly believe that 70% of the investment should be made for public services improvements rather than art and culture. Authorities are obliged to provide better services to its citizens and at the same time,citizens seek better services as they are the taxpayers.
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, authorities have to mark their presence at global platforms by achieving the sustainable
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goals which highly emphasized on providing 100% access to basic public facilities
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as water, sanitation and hygiene. If
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overnment invests a good portion of its budget with
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police
and mission-driven approach, it will enhance the quality of life of its citizen. These positive impacts will boost up the
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and give a surge to the
ountry's
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country's
economic
development
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.
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, in any country, the most vulnerable population, residing in the informal slum settlements are always lacking with basic water, sanitation, health and education facilities. At the same time, they are the pillars of the economy as the
ajority
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majority
of them are labourers who work hard in factories, industries or in construction sectors, etcetera. As the slum dwellers are lacking with basic facilities, affecting their health, they are not able to work with 100% efficiency and
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suffers from severe diseases. When it comes to health facilities, they cannot avail the same either due to its unavailability withing premises/nearby areas or unaffordability. If
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overnment allocates the fund to
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sector and makes policy reforms, it can achieve sustainable
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goals. In spite
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, art, music and theatre are a reflection of a nation's culture and tradition.
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, it cannot be overlooked. A minimum of the budget shall be reserved for
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which helps to create a platform for aspiring personalities of the nation.
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overnment should think of to link
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with the public services as a resource to conduct awareness activities.
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overnment has to balance the budgetary allocation by prioritizing people's need, aligned with
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goals and interweave the sectors with effective policies and missions to achieve sustainable
development
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goals.
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