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rovided diagrams illustrate information on the location options and the design of a wave-energy machine.

rovided diagrams illustrate information on the location options and the design of a wave-energy machine.
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Provided diagrams illustrate information on the location options and the design of a wave-
energy
machine
.
Overall
, given design for a renewable
energy
machine
 using waves is a manmade, cyclical process which has two essential stages, starting with increasing water levels and ending up as electrical
energy
 in
electricity
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an electricity
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 generator. It can be clearly observed that the
machine
 was constructed
in
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opposing
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the opposing
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side
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sides
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 of
sea
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the sea
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 wave direction in order to let the water easily enter the device. By increasing
water
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the water
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 level, the
air flow
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airflow
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 in the first chamber moves to the
second
 one, where it passes through the turbine and leaves the
machine
 from the upper
side
 of the chamber.
Air flow
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 piercing from the
second
 chamber’s left
side
 entrance from above goes in the direction of the turbine, too. Here the propeller starts to work and generates
the
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electrical
energy
. It is obvious that there are two options for the location of the
machine
 with high output and low output, respectively in the large wave zone and small wave zone.
Moreover
, installation costs of
such
a
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non-traditional
energy producing
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energy-producing
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 equipment
also
 differ from each other, regarding their position, since it is low in the area of small waves
next
 to the coastal
side
 and high in the area of large waves.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "second".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words machine, energy, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "waves" was used 6 times.
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