Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid?

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In Society, people usually feel that famous people are extremely paid for their jobs, we all know

that is

too much money, which I agree.

However

that it is a fair high price for losing their private lives,

such

as doctors. The main reason I agree that it is too much paid to work its because daily we can see the amount in news, blogs, and all the social media in the whole world.

However

, I strongly believe that

this

is a fair price for losing their private lives. As I said, we daily deal with some content talking about their lives,

such

as salary, relationship, families and more often about problems than good things, which we know that in “normal”

life

we usually do not like to expose, even with close friends. To illustrate we all can remember about Britney Spears

life

since she was a little kid, which we all know in details about her

life

than we usually know our siblings. In the same way, we can say that when someone, in a

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certain

way, is losing itself

life

, it deserves

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igh salary.

For instance

, doctors, as well as

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stars, frequently

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their lives by working hard in several shifts, its not hard even to say more than 48 hours, usually losing Family memories, holidays and others important celebrate dates. In conclusion, I believe that famous people are paid too much.

However

, those people and doctors are highly paid because they have been losing their private lives. Give

this

situation, it seems fair the extremely amount of money that they receive, everyone knows how much our

life

's costs and it is a high price.

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Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid?

Fully explain your ideas

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