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International marketing is sometimes seen as invasive and an intrusion into the country in question. Others argue that it is a necessary and economical form of education in addition to spreading ideas, language and culture. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It is argued by some that global marketing is often increasing and lead to harmful for
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ountry, while others stated that for extending knowledge of culture and language, it is essential to do marketing at international level.
This
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 raising sell among products of international leads to dangerously affect our local systems and loses
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pportunity for
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ocal
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 to come into a
market
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ecent study at Cambridge
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 found that 70% of sales in
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ocal
market
 are declining just because international goods invade all over the place.
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, improving countries standard global marketing delivers
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rucial role.
This
 is because, it opens doors for obtaining knowledge from other
country
 and spreading our local culture, information as well as making language well-know for others.
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, due to international marketing,
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ountry like India has
appearing
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 in a
market
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arger degree in
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ast decade. In conclusion, preserving our local
market
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however
, for a whole
country
, international marketing needs to welcome in and explore their ideas for countries’ development.
This
 will arise immense advantages for future generation to research more and establish greater infrastructure, and delivering our culture and language to them.
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