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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding changes. Others, However, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #lives #changes #change
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 to spend their
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 their daily routine works.
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 life is just like a daily cycle, morning to evening continuous the same
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usually
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hrowback in the previous decades that our Ancestors were spending their Precious lives in similar activities
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. While,
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pposite opinion. Because they
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 to do something unique in their
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 by changing themselves.
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echnology era, we changed ourselves and
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I can comfortably
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 that change is always good for us because
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