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Given maps illustrate information on how Frenton changed over 32 years between 1990 and 2012. There is High Street passing through the Frenton from south to north and on both sides of the street there are some public buildings, houses and flats.

Given maps illustrate information on how Frenton changed over 32 years between 1990 and 2012. There is High Street passing through the Frenton from south to north and on both sides of the street there are some public buildings, houses and flats.
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Given maps illustrate information on how Frenton changed over 32 years between 1990 and 2012. There is High
Street
 passing through the Frenton from south to north and on both sides of the
street
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,street
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 there are some public buildings, houses and
flats
.
Overall
, the town seems to be tremendously transformed over the given time period with the removal of trees, plunged quantity of
flats
 and replacement of old public buildings with some modern ones. It can clearly be observed that the population has experienced a great increase, that seems to be the reason why the previous places of houses and ex-playing fields with trees have been replaced with new blocks of
flats
.
Moreover
, there is a new
area
 for
flats
 in the north-east of
High
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the High
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Street
 which is located
next
 to the new Hotel and golf course, built in the previous
area
 of
café
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the café
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 and park. Unfortunately, the
area
 for trees in
south-west
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the south-west
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 of
High
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the High
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Street
have
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 been used for the construction of a technopark and parallelly on the other side of the same
street
 a new cinema
have
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has
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 replaced the theatre and shops have been replaced with a supermarket.
Furthermore
,
hospital
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the hospital
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 seems to have a larger
area
 rather than it had before, and a new restaurant
have
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has
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 been built in the place of the bank’s building, but the size of it is a little larger. Interestingly, only
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the school
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school
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schools
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 and
library
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libraries
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 occur to be in the same location with the same dimensions.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words street, flats, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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