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RESEARCH STUDENTS STUDYING 6 SCIENCE-RELATED SUBJECT AT uk UNIVERSITY IN 2009

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The bar chart shows the trend to choose a major of the student studying 6 science-related subject at a
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 university in 2009 Overall, with Biology and Medicine major
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 the highest number of students while in Veterinary medicine major was the lowest As is observed from the given charts, the number of male students participate in voting more than the number of female students. The proportions of male students
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 much higher than the female students except Veterinary medicine. Biology was the choice of most of the students in both
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. In all subjects, In physic major that there is
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isparity between male and female highest, female account for about
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 male.
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, male students almost tend to choose the major of Biology, Physic and Medicine major, only differ by about 20 male students. As well as male students, Biology and Medicine were preferred subject by female students. In
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science was the career trends of male
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