Some people think that in order to produce a happy society, it is necessary to ensure that there is only a small difference between the earnings of the richest and poorest. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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rgue that the community could be harmonious and happier if the financial dissimilarities between the affluent and the well-on people are wider gradually. In my own’s perspective, I wholeheartedly disagree with
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notion, due to the lack of keen competition and motto of life of individuals in
society
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ubjective side, it is undeniable that harsh conditions and fierce competitions are inner motive to encourage the development of
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value and working performance, low-income people in some developed countries are
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on monthly financial public welfare, they regularly enjoy
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edentary lifestyle and costly recreational, like
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amble,
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ore heavy burden on social welfares and national budgets.
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prosperity dwellers should be received financial support to some reasonable extent. On the
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aspect, the positive attitude of economically weaker people poses a good motivation
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life together with high spirit. Obviously,
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trend creates an equal
society
and assist people to overcome all difficulties and even misleading direction.
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riminal record are often have a chance to rehabilitate in jail. If they can take advantage of training job and skillfully, they completely have a good chance to earn a good living career as blue-collar workers after being released from jail. Thereby, broaden the horizon and conveyancing inspiration to aid economically unfortunate people are
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and measure in companion with the harsh competition of modern
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as far as positive images, who try too hard to pass over the poor financial situation in need to propaganda widely to gain the public concerned.
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