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Today, more and more students are deciding to move to another country for their studies. Do you think this is a good or bad Idea?

#students #move #country #studies #idea
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 modern era, education is very important for
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future growth. Most of the students are prefer to
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 in
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 foreign
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 nowadays. I personally think that
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 it is beneficial for them.
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 different
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 is superior for the students.
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tudent will
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,
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etter job can be easily found by them after finishing their graduation.
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 them independent and management skill can be easily developed in them.
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 of
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, they can manage everything perfectly and it is profitable for their future success.
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, in many europian countries, the government are sponsoring students who are willing to
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. So they can learn something unique. Mainly, after their
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, they can apply many new concepts in their own
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 and it will directly
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on
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the
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's progress ratio. If the government will encourage students for
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 than it is profitable for the society.
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,
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 a few drawbacks. When teenagers move in
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 of the world for education
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's
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 drinking and smoking in foreign to become
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modern and it is not good for their health. Overall,
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erits of
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 more than demerits and parents have to send their children
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d
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ifferent
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education. To conclude,
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 in another
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. I believe
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 good for them as well as for their family.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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