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Competitiveness is a positive quality for people in most societies. How does competitiveness affect individuals? Is it a positive or negative trend?

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In today's increasingly progressing
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, Competition becomes more available in people
life
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. Starting from academic to professional
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, everywhere we are fighting to live a better
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. People have always different views about everything. Competitiveness obviously much needed to live in
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world
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. In
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 age of globalization, people are more connected with all types of work. One human has so many skills. But, in the corporate
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, there
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 more competitor in the field. If you want to survive, you have to put your all efforts on your skill. Because, if you cannot do anything, others will take your place. Competitiveness brings some crucial changes in
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ndividual’s
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 of all, they become very strong inner and out. They make a strong personality which makes them very optimistic.
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, they have
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 a
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 where they have always a winning attitude.
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, they not only get success in
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 but they become a role model for youth. The trend,
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, would assemble some types of frustrating consequences.
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 as, in many cases, people becomes more obsessed with work. For that reason, they do not even find any time for family which affects their mental health.
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, too much competitiveness makes human depressed and alone.
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, everything has some positive and negative impact
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 our
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, we have to go with it. The way
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 progressing every day, We must prepare ourselves before we get in professional
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