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Competitiveness is a positive quality for people in most societies. How does competitiveness affect individuals? Is it a positive or negative trend?

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In today's increasingly progressing
world
, Competition becomes more available in people
life
. Starting from academic to professional
life
, everywhere we are fighting to live a better
life
. People have always different views about everything. Competitiveness obviously much needed to live in
this
fast growing
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world
. In
this
 age of globalization, people are more connected with all types of work. One human has so many skills. But, in the corporate
world
, there
are
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 more competitor in the field. If you want to survive, you have to put your all efforts on your skill. Because, if you cannot do anything, others will take your place. Competitiveness brings some crucial changes in
i
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ndividual’s
life
.
First
 of all, they become very strong inner and out. They make a strong personality which makes them very optimistic.
Secondly
, they have
maintain
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 a
life
 where they have always a winning attitude.
As a result
, they not only get success in
life
 but they become a role model for youth. The trend,
on the other hand
, would assemble some types of frustrating consequences.
Such
 as, in many cases, people becomes more obsessed with work. For that reason, they do not even find any time for family which affects their mental health.
In addition
, too much competitiveness makes human depressed and alone.
Finally
, everything has some positive and negative impact
in
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 our
life
 .
However
, we have to go with it. The way
world
 progressing every day, We must prepare ourselves before we get in professional
life
.
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