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Computers are becoming an essential part of school lessons. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion.

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In modern
life
, computers are becoming one of the important devices for school education. In
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I want to describe some advantages and disadvantages that pupils can get when using laptops for learning. I
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, one of
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ain benefit that computers can give for modern teenagers it’s a huge amount of
information
 sources that they can find on the internet. If pupils want to prepare for exams or do some coursework, they will find all the
information
 on the internet and type it
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 their laptops. Youngsters can find enough
information
 for their future profession and be aimed to achieve it. According to
Ukrinian
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Ukrainian
 Academy of Internet Technology,
last
 5 years teenagers use
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omputer for self-development and education 30% often for than before.
However
, in
this
 age pupils can lose social skills, because for conversation or sharing some kind of
information
 they use laptops or smartphones. In modern
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we all use the internet more often for communication and the young
generation
 don’t have enough experience in social
life
. According to the latest research of American Sociological
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University
generation
 Z (people
borned
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born
 in the gap 2002-2005 ) have problems with speaking skills in childhood 30% more than
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eneration before. Overall, the modern
generation
 can be more intelligent and develop their knowledge in many spheres faster than before and computer perfect tools for it.
As a result
, in the future
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we will have more younger and more intelligent workers. According to
information
 from IT Security Companies, 40% of cybercrimes made teenagers.
This
information
 can show us how youngsters increase their level of knowledge and how fast they can learn. In conclusion, computers in school education are very useful devices. In balance with physical activity and
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ocial
life
 that can help pupils be
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smarter and successful in future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Edutainment
  • Multimedia resources
  • E-learning platforms
  • Digital literacy
  • Cyberbullying
  • Ergonomic hazards
  • Cognitive overload
  • Technological proficiency
  • Blended learning environments
  • Instructional technology
  • Adaptive software
  • Screen time management
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