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Online education is becoming more and more popular.some people claim that learning has so many benefits that it will replace face to face education soon.other says that traditional education is irreplaceable Discuss both views and share your opinion

#education #people #face
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ehement idea that online
education
 has beneficial effects on the students, others are opting that
tradational
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traditional
education
 is the essential one. I, personally, side with the latter view. On the one hand,
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equality
 in the
education
 is a must and, the
tradational
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traditional
education
 system does not require any more tools like
computer
, internet connection or silent studying area which makes it cheaper and accessible. Many
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people are not able to afford any other factor except basic
education
 fees.
For example
, in my country, Turkey, the children are coming from indigent families could not connect to the online classes. They do not have
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omputer or internet connection either.
Moreover
, even if they have a
computer
, they have to share it with their siblings. More than one
computer
 in a home is quite
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luxury
 for the developing country citizens.
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, due to the perspective of
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computers
such
 as entertainment stuff, they need to struggle to focus on the teachers and lessons.
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