We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer-based technology. How do you think it will change in the future? Is it good for us to rely so much on computers?
Although
, Mankind
believed that the early foot on the moon was an achievement to Mankind
. I support this
statement to a large extend
for some reasons. My position is argued Replace the word
extent
further
with the explanation. Out of all the bases, the foremost one was the immense fortune of Mankind
which brings endless opportunities to explore. To elaborate, It brings hope of a new place to colonise and expand. Considering the population of he
the world the area is not enough to accommodate. Correct pronoun usage
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Nevertheless
, the first
move towards the neighbour planet gives us also
an opportunity to meet Rephrase
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the
extraterrestrial people if they exist. Correct article usage
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Furthermore
By
extending our boundaries to step forward, Change preposition
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it
brings the Correct pronoun usage
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inhabitants
location to learn and diversify by experimenting and nurturing in a better way. Change noun form
inhabitant's
inhabitants'
Additionally
, I believe in case of doms day
or nuclear war the Capitalize word
Day
first
shelter to
the human species would be Change preposition
for
non-other
than the moon .Correct your spelling
other
This
is because of
day-by-day conflicts betweenChange preposition
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first-world
first
world countries are at their peak. Moreover
, with the proud claim of the first
step on m soon,it gives the ability to think out of our globe and proves the efficiency to search the other planets and universe. For instance
When the
NASA sent Correct article usage
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the
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apollo
11 for its Capitalize word
Apollo
first
footstep to the moon and they succeeded. By considering it gives
the ability to send Wrong verb form
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Apollo
the
mars. Correct article usage
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However
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,
To begin
with, I believe a claim to stride forward humanity did not make any significant difference in day to day
lives. Add a hyphen
day-to-day
Despite
, Keeping in mind the achievement it will take decades to move, and technology is not up to the pace yet.Correct pronoun usage
Despite this
Also
, it does not make any difference because many nations are in the developing stage. Thus
, to conclude
the discussion, it can be finally
said that despite the fact of not making any major gamechanger
in daily life, I believe a step forward is just the beginning, and it will help Correct your spelling
game changers
Mankind
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion