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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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The increasing number of E-Commerce will eventually be the reason for shops in metros and the countryside to go out of business.
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, I disagree that
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 could be a reason for shutting down businesses. To Commence with, online shopping provides a platform for sellers to compete on various aspects including price, quality variety and so on. It diminishes the effect of distance where a seller situated thousands of miles away from the buyer directly interact with the buyer with the help of few clicks.
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 revolution of digitisation lead the way and brings everybody on common grounds to have fair play for everybody. It facilitates a person to choose a product at more customer-friendly prices as compared to any shop down the street.
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, They provide an option to digitise the current system and allow shopkeepers to go beyond the physical boundaries and do businesses.
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, during the pandemic time digital platforms are playing a vital role in delivering the necessities
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 as grocery, medicines and much more. Nowadays imagining a complete lockdown without the help of
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 digital options will be breathtaking.
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, Indian govt is
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 considering the option of using the logistic network of the market players in metros and
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 in distant locations.
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, we might be able to receive our covid vaccines via home delivery directly at our doorstep. To conclude, digital platforms would not be the reason for
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rashing of businesses in cities and towns rather it would promote a fair play between all the parties and helps to sustain mankind during recent times.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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