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Some countries have age 4 as a minimum requirement for admission into schools, whereas other countries believe that age 7 should be the minimum requirement. What is the situation in your country? What do you think is the right age to enter schooling?

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 group for admission of the children varies in different countries, some countries
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 4 minimum
age
limit
, whereas few countries
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 7. I agree on the point, that children should start going to school from the
age
 of 4. The schooling
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 early
age
 increases the overall development and intellectual ability of the
child
. The
child
 will be able to communicate with classmates and teachers. The
child
 becomes extrovert. It will
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 increase the confidence of the
child
.
For Instance
, Even the children have started sharing their experience in front of thousands of audience in Ted talks.
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hild will learn social etiquette from
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ery young
age
. Where children will learn how to behave and act in the public.
However
, with the minimum
age
limit
 of 7, will have to wait for the longer time to complete their education and to get settled. Whereas in my country India, the Minimum
age
limit
 is 4 for the admission in schools. Government has made the rules about the
age
limit
 of admission of a
child
. If the
child
 has not completed 4 years,
then
 the
child
 needs to go to preschool. Government has taken
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ery strict incentive of sending the children to schools. In some places of India, parents have been punished for not sending
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hild to schools at
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roper
age
. In conclusion, I believe it is always good to send the children to school at the
age
 of 4
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 because it increases the ability to understand the things in a better way from
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childhood. It gives the
child
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life in a better way.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • minimum requirement
  • admission
  • early childhood development
  • socialization
  • developmental readiness
  • educational perspectives
  • optimal
  • compulsory education
  • cognitive skills
  • emotional maturity
  • peer interaction
  • academic preparedness
  • curriculum adaptation
  • pedagogical approaches
  • developmental milestones
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