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SOME PEOPLE THINK IT IS BETTER TO CHOOSE FRIENDS WHO ALWAYS HAVE THE SAME OPINION AS THEM. OTHER PEOPLE BELIEVE IT IS GOOD TO HAVE FRIENDS WHO SOMETIMES DISAGREE WITH THEM. DISCUSS BOTH THESE VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

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Friendship is a ship that sails forever in the right company and with people who attempt to do anything to keep the spark alive.
However
, there are different opinions about what kind of friends to choose from. Some individuals think it is better to opt for companions who have a similar mindset
as
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 them. Whereas other groups contradict
this
 thinking.
Firstly
, let's emphasize condition A where people believe in associating with the public who shares like-mindedness. "A friend in need is a friend indeed", the concept is not appreciated in
this
 condition.
For instance
, if there is a situation where one person had to go through a heated discussion with a higher authority
such
 as the boss the argument can go harsh since there is no one to subside that clause which could, in turn, lead to chaos and imbalance,
further
 leading to severe outcomes that they could repent
afterward
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.
On the contrary
, If there is a friend who is from the opposite mindset the situation can be handled in a different perspective and could be calmed down
instead
 of causing a rupture and
thus
 leading to guiltiness in the future.
Secondly
, if condition B is observed,
that is
, if companionships are among differential mindsets
this
 could be a perfect example of the saying "opposites attract".
However
,
such
 pals are often noticed
quarreling
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 among themselves due to opposing points of view. In
this
 scenario, they are likely to preview weak fellowships.
Further
 leading to the conversion of alibis to enemies,
such
 an outcome is not
favorable
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 to either of the parties. In conclusion, I would like to be biased in
such
 a commitment when
this
 kind of hypothetical situations arise to maintain peace and harmony among all the mob. But when forced to land on any decision, I would choose a partner who reflects similar mental instincts as what I present. With few situations to contradict them and to be able to form a spine in hard times.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bond
  • support
  • unconditional love
  • shared values
  • mutual understanding
  • trust
  • emotional well-being
  • interdependence
  • societal norms
  • companionship
  • loyalty
  • advice
  • experiences
  • mentorship
  • trustworthy
  • reliable
  • reliable
  • cherish
  • strengthen
  • deepen
  • attach importance to
  • prioritize
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