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Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of high school students having part-time jobs.

#school #students #jobs
One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is
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dult’s life students who prefer to
work
 during their studying in a high
school
. It is undeniable that
work
 in
this
 period has become an essential part of our life.
However
, there is no absolute agreement as some people find in part-time job beneficial, while others consider everything associated with pass on
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tudy at
school
 negatively. Surely, there are both pros and cons to could be but I believe advantages outweigh drawbacks. One of the main positives of
work
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during studying is that adolescents learn to wage their own money for yourself.
For instance
, the young person wants a new mobile phone which has a lot of variety adds and opportunities
such
 as a calendar, a mail, a video connection as a Skype, a social cell. A good example here is
work
 after lessons as a currier or water in
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 nearest cafe. Turning to the other side of the argument, there is an opinion that, a schoolchild will not be having a high grade in yourself education.
For example
, sometimes child probably can have spent more time only job whereas their curriculum will not be to learn or have
a gaps
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. Another major minus is an early grow up when youngsters do not want to study as they consider that
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 exist education more enough. Having weighed everything mentioned up, we can come to a conclusion that sometimes
work
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 in during study at
school
 brings
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profits for children.
Moreover
, I consider that
work
when schoolchild learns at
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, when schoolchild learns at school,
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school
 teaches
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self-discipline and helps in
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future life. Band Score 5.5-6.0
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