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Now a day the surveillance is happening at almost all public places is it good or perceived bad by the people. What are its advantages and disadvantages?

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With the booming population, crime is increasing at an alarming rate all over the world. To curb violation authority have to take precautionary measures in that
government
 keep
surveillance
 on people and places as precautionary measures. Some people find it necessary and others believe it is bad. I personally think that keeping
surveillance
 on public places is beneficial for society and country as well. Nowadays Crime is happening at every
second
 at some corner of the world, to prevent it and to grab the criminals every administration have to take some measures. As public places are more crowded
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 possibilities of crime taking place are more
hence
 authority have to maintain the security of place and people for that they have to keep
surveillance
 of place. By putting
surveillance
 the
government
 can monitor the activity of suspicious people
also
 gain some valuable intel for future crimes by recording their movement.
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overnment have put CCTV cameras and metal detectors in Akshardham Temple of Gandhinagar as it is visited by 50000 people every day,
therefore
 keeping track of every individual visiting it is must to prevent any attack on a temple that can jeopardize the lives of thousands of people. Several security agents can
also
 be deployed at public places that can handle any situation. On other hand, by having
surveillance
 on public places
government
 keep on eye of people in
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llegal way that can affect the privacy of individuals.
Also
,CCTVs can record private moments of public and it can be misused in many ways.
Also
,all people should be treated as criminals. Agglomerating all the points described above it can be concluded that the
government
 should put
surveillance
 on public places for security reasons
also
 to curb the crime. Its advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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