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To succeed in business, one needs to know math. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people regard
math
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 skills as a key factor to achieve
success
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 in
business
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 as it facilitates the
decision making
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 process.
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, I believe it is only
one
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 out of various factors that contribute to
business
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success
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 and
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 non-essential. On the
one
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 hand,
math
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 enables key people to make better decisions.
One
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 application of
business
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 mathematics is to provide statistics that can predict future scenarios. These predictions might lay a firm foundation for more informed and evidence-based decisions, replacing biased ones based on managers’ gut feelings. For decades, Unilever has utilised a statistical model that can forecast the supply and demand of fast-moving consumer goods, allowing the company leaders to promptly plan production and sales of each product category.
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, I believe that
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 can run a
business
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 successfully without excellent
math
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 skills. In fact, many entrepreneurs have built billion-dollar enterprises thanks to great personal qualities. A good example in
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 case is Nguyen Thanh Duc, the chairman of NTD Group. He was known to be a disruptive student
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 failed almost all school subjects including
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, yet he rose to become an inspirational leader who could motivate his employees to strive to gain collective
success
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 for the corporation. In addition, his
success
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 is attributed to the courage to take the risks that rational calculations,
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 as those that guide Unilever, would rule out. As these leadership qualities concurred with
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good fortune, his startup has evolved into a multinational
business
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 empire, becoming
market
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a market
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leaders
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 in many industries including real estate, fishery and forestry. In conclusion,
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 statistical
math
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 could help make better decisions, I am of the opinion that
risk taking
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, inspirational personality traits and luck are crucial to drive an enterprise to
success
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.
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 why
business
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 schools should focus more on honoring interpersonal skills including leadership and communication.
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Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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