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Nuclear energy is a better choice for meeting increasing demand. Do you agree or disagree?

#energy #choice #demand
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Some people hold the belief that nuclear
power
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 should be used more than other sources of
energy
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 because it satisfies the global demand for
energy
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. While I agree with the apparent benefits of nuclear
power
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, I believe that it
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 has potential dangers involved. Nuclear
power
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 is very friendly with the environment and has advantages for people.
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 of all, when we use nuclear
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 for production, it releases the lack of carbon dioxide emission into the atmosphere compared with other sources like coal, gas, etc.
Secondly
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, in the past, electricity generation by
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ource like coal only produced a few units which
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 not enough to provide for the demand of humans.
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, in
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modern time, thanks to nuclear
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, we are able to create huge amounts of
power
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.
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, we will have a large amount of electricity to serve many people.
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,
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 nuclear
energy
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 has a variety of advantages, it
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 has negative impacts which could outweigh its merits.
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 stations because of the fact that it is costly to construct.
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, nuclear
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 is not well-known in developing countries like Vietnam, Africa, etc.
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, accidental radiation leak is one of the most serious drawbacks of nuclear
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.
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 radiation leak can be controlled
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if it happened, it would pose a threat to people's health and the environment which was allocated surrounding
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 plant.
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, if nuclear
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 is taken advantage of by terrorism, the world’s peace will be threatened by nuclear weapons and it
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 war among different countries. To sum up, I partly agree with the opinion that nuclear
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 should be used for meeting ever-increasing global needs
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 of using other sources of
power
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.
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, we should pay attention to
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 disadvantages.
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