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In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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With the changing times, travelling has become an inevitable part of human
life
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. People are becoming more
travel
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 enthusiast to run away from their busy and hectic routine
life
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. But
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ecent trend suggests that
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umber of people going on holiday to abroad is increasing and in future
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this
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 trend will extend to
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ext level. Nowadays the
world
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 is getting smaller due to faster and more convenient ways of transportation
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 people can visit any place they wish to. As
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urrent generation is impatient, people don’t want to spend their whole
life
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 at
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on
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 place so they want to see and explore the
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 in search of
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etter lifestyle and opportunities. Some people are reluctant to settle
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 one place
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 they just
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 around different places.
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people are having more disposable income
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 they spend their money on holidays
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abroad to show off their extravagant lifestyle.
Trend
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 of exploring different parts of
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orld to know more about cultures, religions and languages will expand in future. One
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my friend’s uncle once travelled to
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the
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SA for holiday but he got fascinated about foreign
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 so he settled there later.
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I was travelled to
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aldives for my honeymoon
instead
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 of going anywhere in my
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 because at some time you get used by travelling to almost same places and wish to see other more wonderful places
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 for experience beauty of the
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.
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there are
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 a group of people who choose to go on holiday in their own
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 to support local culture and tradition. By travelling to your own
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 will enrich the people
that
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relying
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 on
travel
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 business and can boost
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verall economy as well. Agglomerating all the points described above it can be concluded that people will choose to
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 abroad in future for numerous reasons but
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 some people will stick to their
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 for
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pliftment of economy and enhancement of
life
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 of people residing there.
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